Luka's Writing learning story

Luka’s writing Learning story.

Thousands of people crowded in a special place where all the magic happens! 

I look out and I see thousands of families waiting for their kids to get on that stage and sing their hearts out.

As we are sitting, waiting to go on I hear one of the teachers say 1 more minute until senior samoan group are on. 

Then my heart drops like a bomb!!

Walking on the stage I see all the happy faces in the crowed but for some reason I get goose bumps.

I'm walking on the stage with a big smile on my face but a flock of butterflies in my rumbling tummy.

As we perform I’m sweating with fear like I got put in to jail.

Before I know i'm walking off with a smile that will never come off my face. I look over my red firing shoulder and I see families cheering like maniacs.  

I was good at coming up with words that could make my reader feel like they wher in the story at the time.

I need to work not adding those words that will kind of make the reader feel like they weren't in the story because it makes them kind of go off track.